My brother Richard wrote these notes. He is a skilled craftsman and philosopher with a penchent for reading and writing. Currently he is writing a travel narrative focused on New England. His notes talk about writing creative non-fiction. The tools of this trade can be very powerful if used well. It is a great art of communication.--Keith

 

 

Richard Pezzoli

rpezzoli@suffolk.lib.ny.us

June, 2002

CONTENTS

Creative Non-Fiction.
Making a choice.
Think in Scenes:
Research Methods:
Saturate and Immerse:
The purpose of interviewing:
Show don’t tell.
The Interview.
The Challenges of Research.
The Realities of Individual Lives.
Dialogues, Monologs, and other logs.
Character Development.
Special Techniques.

 

Creative Non-Fiction.

        
     I have often used the term creative nonfiction, lately, and have been telling my friends something of what it means. I’m learning what it means.

 

     I purchased Zinsser’s book “On Writing Well.” I find many useful tips in his book.

 

     “Ultimately every writer must follow the path that feels most comfortable,” Zinsser writes. “For most people learning to write, that path is nonfiction. It enables them to write about what they know or can observe or can find out. This is especially true of young people and students. They will write far more willingly about subjects that touch their own lives or that they have an aptitude for. Motivation is the heart of writing. If nonfiction is where you do your best writing, or your best teaching of writing, don’t be buffaloed into the idea that it’s an inferior species.”

 

    I bought another book in the same section in the bookstore called Writing Creative Nonfiction, by Theodore A. Cheney.  This book also has many helpful tips.  In this book Cheney spells out in fine detail the various techniques used in writing creative nonfiction. Zinsser writes more about what creative nonfiction is in the larger sense. This larger sense may be useful information but I want to learn what the tools of the craft are in themselves before anything else.

 

     “If a man has a house to build, his impetuous hand does not rush into action. The measuring line of his mind first lays out the work, and he mentally outlines the successive steps in a definite order. The mind’s hand shapes the entire house before the body’s hand builds it. Its mode of being is archetypal before it is actual…let the poet’s hand not be swift to take up the pen, nor his tongue be impatient to speak; trust neither hand nor tongue to the guidance of fortune. To ensure greater success for the work, let the discriminating mind act as a prelude to action. Defer the operation of hand and tongue. And ponder long on the subject matter. Let the mind’s interior compass first at what point the pen will take up its course, or where it will fix its Cadiz. As a Prudent workman, construct the whole fabric within the mind’s citadel; let it exist in the mind before it is on the lips.” Poetica Nova, Geoffrey of Vinsauf. ca. 1200.

 

    I found this quote in my notes from a review of the Norton Anthology of Literary Criticism, a book that speaks about what literature is, or is not, in voices from across the ages –and it seems to fit in here. I mention it because it is a literary device. It is literary to add quotes from other authors that eloquently illustrates your subject, especially if you can’t come up with one yourself. It may also be that I relate to the quote because I’m a house builder myself. I’ve learned in the course of that profession that I wouldn’t want to build anything without first possessing the tools. So what are these tools?

     Cheney says in his book that a creative nonfiction writer must write in scenes and this makes good sense.     “In traditional journalism” Cheney writes,” the basic building block was the fact. Reporters rushed around collecting facts from dusty records at City Hall, interviewing experts, and talking with the people involved. Facts piled on facts, interview quotes stacked on interview quotes. All of this took place in the name of accuracy, completeness, and objectivity –certainly not n the name of readability or memorability. Creative nonfiction writers, by contrast, remain as respectful of facts. They usually have the time to dig up far more facts about a story than do deadline-haunted reporters, but they don’t think of them as the basic building blocks of their stories; they ‘think scenes’ instead.”

  

    An important consideration before you begin to write in scenes is choosing the form or structure of your book in the first place. The creative nonfiction writer Annie Dillard, the pilgrim at tinker creek, says it would be best for the beginning creative writer to write an entire book. “It makes more sense to write one big book –a novel or nonfiction narrative- than to write stories or essays,” Dillard writes. “Into a long, ambitious project you can fit or pour all you possess and learn. A project that takes five years will accumulate those years’ inventions and richnesses. Much of those years’ reading will feed the work. Further, writing sentences is difficult whatever their subject. It is not less difficult to write sentences in a recipe than sentences in Moby-Dick. So you might as well write Moby-Dick.”

 

     Cheney in his chapter on structure writes “most professional creative nonfiction writers have a structure well in mind before writing at length. The advance consideration of structure is not wasted; in fact, It has value beyond the most obvious: by continually turning over the compost of the mind, the materials become firmly entrenched in memory –and by being in the brain rather than just on paper, the material is promoted in the subconscious. There’s no predicting what will grow in this repeatedly plowed and harrowed ground with all its varied nutrients. In such fertile soil sprout the seeds of serendipity.”

 

     The point may be a little esoteric but I see what he means. “I believe you should know the ending before you begin writing.” Zinsser says the same thing. So does John McPhee.  “Establishing the structure before you start writing” Cheney continues, “may sound terribly mechanical and too linear for the creative mind, but I don’t believe that’s so. Having the security of structure (even just some structure) enables the writer to relax and play with any number of creative possibilities to perk up each floor (paragraph). To solve any problem creatively you have to let the mind periodically go wild and wooly. This is difficult to do when you’re uncertain about what will come next, and what after that, and how it will all end. You are forced to keep asking yourself: if I go with this crazy but interesting idea that right now seems to be evolving, where could I go from there? This continuous, haunting uncertainty dampens our ability to let lose the fetter of conventional thinking.”

     The other consideration that Cheney mentions is the relationship between the one who tells the story and the story itself –his consideration that may help determine if the story should be told in the first or third person point of view. Parishioners of creative nonfiction write both ways. Some say the third person point of view is the most difficult but the most rewarding –since the author has to stay more out the way. You can focus on your subject and stay the hell out of the way. “One great danger in writing first person narrative” Cheney adds, “is the tendency for the “I” character to take over, rather than keeping the focus on the main character (or characters)” in the story.  The lesson here is if you are going to write in the first person like Dillard learn how to get out of the way; be subjective (its unavoidable) but maintain objectivity. It’s a balancing act. It has to do with finding a voice.

 

      Harper’s editor, Lewis Lapham, writes: “On first opening a book I listen for the sound of the human voice. By this device I am absolved from reading much of what is published in a given year. Most writers make use of institutional codes (academic, literary, political, bureaucratic, technical), in which they send messages already deteriorating into the half-life of yesterday’s news. Their transmissions remain largely unintelligible, and unless I must decipher them for professional reasons, I am content to let them pass by. I listen, instead, for a voice in which I can hear the music of the human improvisation as performed through 5,000 years on the stage of recorded time…as a student, and later as an editor and occasional writer of reviews, I used to feel obliged to finish every book I began to read. This I no longer do. If within the first few pages I cannot hear the author’s voice…I abandon him at the first convenient opportunity.”

 

     Philip Lopate’s introduction to his anthology “The Art of the Personal Essay” describes the scope or limits of the personal voice and various famous authors have made their voice sound authentic, spontaneous and human (especially Montaigne.)  Give his ideas consideration because, once the voice is found, “The writer can posture, say things not meant, imply things not said” and have his fun. Cheney says once he finds the right voice for a piece of writing, “it admits play, and that’s a relief, an antidote to being pushed around by your own words. Mark Kramer writes that a “Voice that admits of ‘Self’ can be a great gift to readers. It allows warmth, concern, compassion, flattery, shared imperfections –all the real stuff that, when it’s missing, makes writing brittle and larger than life.”

  

Making a choice.

       At this point in discussing what the term creative nonfiction means with my friends I usually tell them something about the particular form, point of view and voice that I have chosen for my own particular work.  I am choosing to write one big book like Annie Dillard said so I can experiment and practice and cram everything in, even the stuff I haven’t yet learned. The travel narrative will be my form. It is probably the simplest form. It is chronological; it doesn’t play tricks with time. It goes from point A to point B to point C etc. and usually comes back to the beginning when the author gets home. I can’t vouch that I’ll not make a new home somewhere else when I travel but the writer of a travel narrative usually comes back to his beginning.  Besides that there are my parents to consider. They are both elderly and frail; I need to come back for them.

 

     It is curious to note that I’ve been reading John Steinbeck’s book Travels with Charlie as an example of how to write a travel narrative and that Cheney quotes Steinbeck in his own book for similar reasons. Cheney says that Steinbeck’s travel book has an “organic” structure, a simple style, with scenic descriptions and interviews and conversations that are mixed with occasional self-reflections. The first portion of the book even takes off from the place I will start myself –here on Long Island. Steinbeck went to California to visit his old buddies at the cannery but he started out from Sag Harbor, in the late summer, after Hurricane Donna nearly sunk his boat. Steinbeck traveled around the country in a camper van with his poodle dog Charlie but he had a boat moored in the harbor –while his wife stayed at home. But once he got the boat secured and said goodbye to his wife and finally got started on his trip he took the Orient Ferry and went north to Maine –which, incidentally, is where I also hope to go.

 

      I don’t think it’s proper to write at length about my impending meeting with Arnie Neptune the full-blood Penobscot Chief but he lives in Maine. Arnie is the great great grand son of Louis Neptune, the same Louis Neptune who Thoreau wanted to employ as a guide to paddle up the river and hunt moose and climb Mt.Katadhin with his cousin W.Thatcher (on his second of three trips to Maine). Thoreau knew that Louis had been up the mountain before; Louis actually saved the lives of his climbers by setting up rock towers at the top of the mountain. He placed the towers along the trail as they climbed in case it should snow which it did. Anyone who has climbed this mountain will understand Louis’s precautions. Once you get onto the tableland above tree line it’s like traveling in Tibet, a windblown and rocky landscape where objects are dwarfed in size. The top of this mountain is peculiar because it seems to have been sheer off, which in was, by a glacier. It is entirely denuded of trees and you can very easily loose the trail over the lichen-covered rocks as you make the assent to the summit  --if it snows. In any case Louis didn’t want to go with Thoreau on that particular day. Whether or not Louis was drinking, as Thoreau seemed to imply has not been entirely established. I will ask Arnie about that. Thoreau and Thatcher in the meantime went with Joe Polis who was another Penobscot Indian Guide and the rest, as they say, is history.

 

     Another consideration about writing this book alongside the ones I mention has to do with Intention or Focus. This same question occurs in a number of other books I’ve been reading on creative nonfiction. I find all the answers equally intriguing but they seem to boil down to this: a writer must ask himself what is his intention or focus when writing his book. If the book is going to be a travel narrative, where is he going and what does he hope to achieve?  Steinbeck’s Travels with Charlie was a kind of vast American retrospective  (he admits this himself) of a well-established author who was somewhat advanced in years, overweight, and probably sick from drinking too much. His doctors prescribed he hit the road and that’s what he did. He needed a vacation. He had spent too many years sitting closed up in his office sharpening pencils and needed to get out on the land and talk with the people.

 

        “I began my little pilgrimage” R.L. Stevenson wrote about his own travels, “in the most enviable of all humors: that in which a person, with a sufficiency of money and a knapsack, turns his back on a town and walks forward into a country of which he knows only by the vague report of others.”  Travel writing contains a question of trust.

        “For my part” he continues, “I travel not to go anywhere, but to go. I travel for travel’s sake. The great affair is to move; to feel the needs and hitches of our life more nearly; to come down off this feather bed of civilization, and find the globe granite underfoot and strewn with cutting flints. Alas, as we get up in life, and are more pre-occupied with out affairs, even a holiday is a thing that must be worked for. To hold a pack upon a pack-saddle against a gale out of the freezing north is no high industry, but it is one that serves to occupy and compose the mind. And when the present is so exacting, who can annoy himself about the future?”

 

      I am leaving for Maine this week. I have appointments with the elder Arnie Neptune of the Penobscot Nation this weekend. What happens after that is anyone’s guess. But I will follow the scenes, and write the scenes.

     I will be meeting with Arnie Neptune in the Concord Library where he and Connie Baxter are lecturing on Indian Futures and the spirits of Mt.Katadhin. I will try to persuade them after the lecture to go for a swim in Walden Pond but that I can’t predict. Miss Baxter said she likes to swim in the nude.

      After the Concord affair we will attend the Pow Wow on their Indian Island Reservation and after that sit at a round table for a discussion about possible grants. We will then see a photo exhibit of Katadhin by Miss. Baxter. Miss Baxter is a photographer and the great grand niece of the Governor Baxter who named Baxter Park where Mt.Katadhin is. I aim to go paddling with Arnie Neptune’s nephew Stan on the river but whether or not I get him to guide a hunt for moose is too early to predict. They certainly do still hunt moose in Maine but the season isn’t until October. And I’m not sure Stan has a license to hunt, if he’s not hunting on his own land. In any case I will keep an eye on the scenes.

 

Think in Scenes:

    “The same dramatic need that exists in fiction exists in nonfiction,” Chaney writes. “We like to see scenes in front of us. After all, life does seem to occur as a series of scenes.

     “Before starting to write, ask yourself what could be transmitted to the reader best by a scene. Some of these potential scenes will be embedded in the narrative summary, but it’s important to first identify the scenes that make up a story.

     “What constitutes a scene? A scene is creative nonfiction includes who, where, when and what people said and even what people said they thought at the time (using interior monologs). A scene occurs in a specific place (where); usually the narrator and one or more others are there (who); at a particular time (when); something happens (what); people converse (dialog or captured conversation); and sometimes someone thinks about something (interior monolog)…. Although usually done sparingly, you might introduce your thoughts on the situation or the people.  You are the narrator. ”

      “In creative nonfiction” Cheney informs us, “you almost always have the choice of writing the summary form, the dramatic form, or some combination of the two. (The dramatic form is the same as the scenic form).

     “Because the dramatic method of writing provides the reader with a closer imitation of life than summary ever could, creative nonfiction writers frequently choose to write scenically. The writer wants vivid images to transfer into the mind of the reader; after all, the strength of scenic writing lies in its ability to evoke sensual images…a scene makes the past present…the reader sees the characters in action, see their gestures, hears their voices in conversation…. The main point behind writing scene by scene is that since the brain is “involved’ in the scenes, it more readily accepts the narrative information. As in fiction, in creative nonfiction you can use scenes to do certain narrative work….”

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Research Methods:

     “Readers today expect creative nonfiction writers, journalists especially, to provide not only a complete and objective treatment; they also expect some subjective treatment, which usually means treating the emotional content of the story…. our minds use emotions to add meaning and clarity to straight, factual information….

     “Creative nonfiction writers still use the basic research method –interviewing—but they also use many more methods. They talk with the people immediately involved in the story to flush out, and later to flesh out, the who, what, when , where, why and  how elements of the traditional news story.”

 

Saturate and Immerse:

     “This highly involved research effort, sometimes called, appropriately, ‘saturation reporting’ or ‘immersion research,’ requires that the writer be willing (and financially able) to stick with a story for weeks, months, or even years.’

     Well yes I have a year to flush and flesh. So lets see what else.

 

 

     “The fiction writer can hole up in a garret or a cabin and work largely out of his or her memory and imagination, but the creative nonfiction writer can’t work out of those sources alone. He or she must conduct research out in the real world, the raucous world, the dirty world. This requirement to work away from the studio or the study turns some writers away from this form of writing. Others love that side of the profession –it’s what draws them in.” It’s my cup of tea.

 

The purpose of interviewing:

    “Interviewing is usually a great part of the research effort for this kind of writing. The interview is the corner stone for most nonfiction articles and books because interviews add so much.  They add fresh ideas, ideas you might never have come up with on your own. They provide different angles, views, perspectives, and insights on the person or the topic under study. They give you names of other people you might interview….” (Round and round we go).

 

      Cheney, interestingly enough, says that he never heard of these methods until he read Leon Surmelian’s book, Techniques of Fiction Writing.

     “A creative nonfiction writer will typically conceive of his or her story as a series of scenes connected by a series of summaries  --drama connected by narrative.  He or she will plan an article or book around a series of scenes, selecting only those events that seem to have the greatest dramatic potential and then organizing them in what seems the best sequence (which is not always chronological). The writer will then accomplish other of his or her purposes in between with what we’ll call ‘summaries.’ We’ll use ‘summaries’ here to mean the typical narrative journalists write, summaries of what happened, as distinct from a running account of what is happening at the moment.” 

 

     Cheney goes on to explain in detail what the two methods are and how they are matched (summary and dramatic). He says things for instance like this: “the dramatic method is the cinematographer’s close-up shot; the summary method, in contrast, is the long shot…for the best effect, the two methods merge. A single paragraph may us the techniques of both scene and summary.”

 

Show don’t tell.

     “You’ve probably heard (and have perhaps even wisely heeded) the advice given to writers to show, don’t tell. Dramatic method is show; summary method is tell.”

     “In writing, ‘showing’ means much more than offering visuals of the mind’s eye. You can also show something about a person by letting the reader ‘hear’ him or her speak…when people appear, and particularly when they begin to converse, the story comes to life.”

     Bruce Chatwin, Cheney cites, opens the chapter “An old Log Cabin” is his book In Patagonia with conversation:

“Feel it,” she said. “Feel the wind coming through.”

     I put my hand to the wall. The draught blew through the chinks where the mortar had fallen out. The log cabin was the North American kind. In Patagonia they made cabins differently and did not chink them with mortar. The owner of the cabin was a Chilean Indian woman clad Sepulveda.

    “In winter it’s terrible,” she said. “I covered the wall with  materia plastica but it blew away. The house is rotten, Senor, old and rotten. I would sell it tomorrow. I would have a concrete house, which the wind cannot enter. Senor Sepulveda was grogged out of his mind, half sitting, half lying by the kitchen stove.

     “Would you buy the hose?” she asked.

     “No” I said, “but don’t sell if for nothing. There are North American gentleman who would pay good money to take it away piece by piece.”

 

     “Nonfiction and fiction writers (again) alike must plan in advance which thing might be presented best by scene and which by summary. Since creative nonfiction is typically written scene by scenes (dramatically) and since scenes are usually joined (or separated) by passages that use one of more techniques of summary, you need to study and perfect both techniques.”

 

     In the next chapter “Authority through realistic details” Cheney discusses at length using concrete detail. “Readers of all types and levels,” he says, “seem to need and appreciate concrete detail.” Cheney says that readers like concrete detail especially if these details “enter the brain in an envelope of emotion.” Refer to the text for examples how this is done.

     Cheney says “The method is to write in a minimal way, largely providing the facts of a situation and accurate reporting on what people do…the writer does not tell us the meaning, nor what emotions to feel, nor what emotions the characters are feeling. All of this is left to the reader’s brain, to add its details from personal experience to what’s happening in the story, thereby bringing to the story the emotions the reader felt in the original experience. Like a haiku, this kind of writing requires an intelligent, experienced reader, for it to achieve in the reader’s brain an emotion as close as possible to what the writer experienced originally.” Pg.44.

    

The Interview.

     The most difficult part of the process Cheney admits, when writing a creative nonfiction book, is the Interview; its not to be taken lightly.  It’s unnatural, artificial, but necessary. Use a tape recorder and don’t be chicken. Use prepared questions. Arrive early. Look nice.

     “The interview is one of the most complex mental exercises you are apt to be called upon to conduct. Considering how many distinct activities the brain must undertake simultaneously. I liken it to that of an air traffic controller at Chicago’s O’Hare Field during the Christmas holidays, with a heavy snowfall during prime landing time. It’s not unlike the simultaneous thinking process going on in the brains of a television technical director producing a live news show, the multiple ‘feeds’ coming in live from around the world, slides coming in from a projector, film coming in from a film chain, and three cameras operating, not to mention a live radio feed from Beirut supplemented by a video tape that’s just arrived by plane. In the midst of voices coming over the headphones and people handing him or her notes, the director has to instruct and coordinate (in real time) the activities of a half-dozen people- and the living-room view must not be allowed to sense the chaotic control room scene. Everything must seem under cool, professional control.”   In other word a tape recorder is a must. McPhee and Talese don’t feel they are.

     Sincerity, intelligence about your subject, empathy, and genuine personal interest help during the interview process. You better get this straight.  Keep your opinions to yourself and warm up with a conversation about something relevant and near, the children perhaps, sports, books on the shelf;  listen closely and watch. Ask open-ended questions and ask why. Elicit anecdotes…little stories about your character or topic. Once they start coming maybe they won’t stop…so don’t rush to the next question. Keep the mouth shut. Act enthusiastic, say nice things, and be appropriately enthralled when that’s right. Ask people what they felt and thought about something, at the time that something happened –monolog material. Be gracious when ending. Inform the person what you will do next –with these notes. Send them a copy if they want.

     Don’t lead the jury. Don’t stick rigidly to your list of questions. Don’t be afraid to ask dumb questions. Don’t be afraid to revisit a question you didn’t understand.

    

The Challenges of Research.

     “You’ll need, too, to dig deep into the emotional side of those interviewed, uncovering their innermost thoughts and feelings, if you’re to give your readers that subjective reality which, when combined artfully with the objective reality, will paint for them as honest and accurate a picture of the world as it’s possible for you, a fallible human, to paint. Emotional content enables you to create dramatic, vivid, accurate scenes.” To get a story from a particular subject you may have to be pokey. Poke, poke, poke.  And like Janet Malcolm said don’t let the natives cook you in their pot. You cook them first.  Dig up the dirt and let it rip like Malcolm says (or maybe not  --and don’t forget include thyself).

      Cheney writes that we have to learn to watch people unusually close, especially for anything unusual or distinct. Include in your report “poses, posturing, habitual gestures, mannerisms, appearances, glances.”

     “Writers frequently describe a group’s entertainment as a way to understand the group…frequently look at the way people dress.” 

     “This is a great town, really great. (from Zen and the art of M.M.)  Surprised there were any like this left. I was looking all over this morning. They’ve got Stockman’s bars, high-top boots, silver –dollar belt buckles, Levis, Stetsons, the whole thing…and it’s real. It isn’t just Chamber of Commerce stuff…. In the bar down the block this morning they hjust started talking to me like I’d lived here all my life.”

     Writing about the typical daily life of a person helps illuminate a book and brings in the focus. Write about the people’s “ornaments, decorations, adornments, architecture, and arts…furniture to pets.

 

      William Least Heat-Moon is often quoted in the text. Heat-Moon shows us a segment of society in Kentucky by describing some of the ornaments and adornments of the people:

     “The highway took me through Danville, where I saw a pillared antebellum mansion with a trailer court on the front lawn. Route 127 ran down a long valley of pastures and fields edged by low, rocky bluffs and split by a stream the color of muskmelon. In the distance rose the foothills of the Appalachians, old mountains that once separated the Atlantic from the shallow inland sea now the middle of American. The licks came out of the hills, the fields got smaller, and there were little sawmills cutting hardwoods into pallets, crates, and fence posts. The houses shrank, and their color changed to white to pastels to iridescent to no paint at all. The lawns went from Vertagreen bluegrass to thin fescue to hard packed dirt glinting with fragments of glass, and the lawn ornamented changed from birdbaths to plastic flamingoes and donkeys to broken down automobiles with raised hood like tombstones. On the porch stood one-legged wringer washers and ruined sofas, and, by the front doors, washtubs hung like coats of arms.”

Yikes! The man sure can write. I never liked his attitude but he sure can write.

 

The Realities of Individual Lives.

      The creative nonfiction writer can and should occasionally “vividly describe the day-to-day life of one person.”  John McPhee is often quoted in the text as a master of this craft. He is another Princeton man like Zinsser –who later went to Yale.

      The following is an excerpt from McPhee’s Pine Barrens for a close up view of a person. McPhee was out for a walk in the Barrens and looking for a drink of water. “I called out to ask if anyone was home, and a voice called back, ‘Come in. Come in. Come on the hell in.”

          “I walked through a vestibule that had a dirt floor, stepped up into a kitchen, and went into another room that had several overstuffed chairs in it and a porcelain-topped table, where Fred Brown was seated, eating a pork chop. He was dressed in a white sleeveless shirt, ankle–top shoes, and undershorts. He gave me a cheerful greeting and, without asking why I had come or what I wanted, picked up a pair of khaki trousers that had been tossed onto one of the overstuffed chairs and asked me to sit down. He set the trousers on another chair, and he apologized for being in the middle of his breakfast, explaining that he seldom drank much but the night before he had had a few drinks and this had caused his day to start slowly. “I don’t know what’s the matter with me, but there’s got to be something the matter with me, because drink don’t agree with me anymore,” he said. He had a raw onion in one hand, and while he talked he shaves slices from the onion and ate them between bits of the chop….”

 

    Notice the telling dialogue. It breaks up the piece, adds a voice with some character. It’s a perfect vignette, spontaneous and perfect. McPhee says elsewhere that he doesn’t prepare for Interviews for precisely that reason. He doesn’t use a tape recorder either. He writes notes. He doesn’t want to frighten his prey. In this way he preserves the spontaneous moment –nothing seems calculated and the encounter seems as real as life, as real as if we were there ourselves –which is part of the illusion, its immediacy, its simplicity, its inevitability.  But we should probably remember that McPhee is a very calculating person, like the hunter stalking prey. The creative nonfiction writer in him has developed a stance or an attitude toward life, toward his encounters, which he carries over into his stories. This stance is crafty. It is spontaneous and self-conscious, natural and easy but also alert, casual yet very aware, perhaps even cunning –he is always looking for the telling detail or telling expression in these encounters (the scenes included), to use as materials for his craft. It is not a natural attitude entirely…but probably a fitting one for us.

 

Dialogues, Monologs, and other logs.

     “A creative nonfiction writer does not use all the conversations captured during research. Similar to the use of character detail, only those bits that seem most illustrative of the subject matter under consideration or revelatory of one or more of the persons involved in the conversation are used.”

     Examples follow in Cheney’s text, examples of captured conversations, of Nixon talking to the studio people on the set, of Nixon’s neighbors talking about Nixon’s book, of Joe DiMaggio talking with his golf buddies showing how he acts towards fans etc.  How to get material for creating Monologs is discussed next (where a person is showed to think private thoughts and feelings). Using a speech given by a person: it may be a formal speech, or an excerpt from it, or it may simply be a lengthy speech by one person within a lengthier conversation between two or more people.  It could also be a lecture, or part of one, given by a professor, minister, or drill sergeant. “The writer can say a great deal about a person simply be recording accurately what he or she says, especially when speaking at length.” Capturing  snippets of Telephone conversations can be interesting, as well as snippets from the street.

     Item: An eminent, kind and cultivated actress, beautifully dressed, is taking a cab to an address on Second Avenue. Cabdriver: Whereabouts is that on Second Avenue, lady? Actress, without a flicker in her equanimity: Don’t ask me, bud, You’re the fucking cabdriver.

     Item:  I feel a sort of furry clutch at my right leg, and peering down, find that it is being bitten by a chow. Oh Goochy you naughty thing, says its owner, who is following behind with a brush and shovel for clearing up its excrement, you don’t know that person.

 

      Here is an example of writing that includes specialized knowledge, fishing jargon, and local dialect. When recording local dialect we are reminded not to overdo the case. “The creative nonfiction writer should capture the speaker’s accent, dialect, colloquialisms, jargon, specialist language, rhythm, color, tone, emphases, and mood…be careful not to stereotype too many idiosyncrasies or a person’s speech.”

 

     “Some people are plain feared of crabs, though Lord knows they can’t hurt you much.” Mike grins from one jug ear to another. “Sometimes they get to you,” he says.

     “Indeed they do. Maine lobsterman can safely remove the much smaller numbers of lobsters found in their pots with bare hands, seizing them from the rear. Chesapeake crabbers cannot do this. Unlike the lobster, the blue crab has excellent rear vision. There are too many crabs in each pot in any case for such individual seizure. You simply plunge in with both hands and separate the tangling masses as best you can, suffering an occasional bite from a big Jimmy (male) that will make even the most hardened crabber wince. Between such bites and the constant handling of pot wire the fabric-lined ‘Best’ rubber gloves last no more than two weeks during periods of heavy catches. “You get a hole in them,” Grant adds, “the crabs will find it.”

     “We pull up a shiny new pot set down a few days ago. It is absolutely jammed. Maybe fifty sooks (females). “New pots seem to attract females this time of year,” Grant observes. “Don’t know why. Ain’t nobody really knows about crabs.”

 

Character Development.

     Traditional nonfiction, particularly journalist nonfiction, never concerned itself with developing characters…revealing a person’s character. This chapter shows how its done. Capturing conversations is the key.  Show the reader how things look to your character in the world, leaving the reader to interpret what it all means. Don’t moralize. Quote the main folks in authority but also the “enlisted men.” Short phrases or outbursts are often telling. “Speak so I may see you.”

McPhee again:

     “Eventually, I made the request. I had intended to make when I walks in the door. “Could I have some water” I said to Fred. “I have a jerry can and I’d like to fill it at the pump.”

     “Hell, yes,” he said. “That isn’t my water. That’s God’s water. That right, Bill?”

     “I guess so,” Bill said, without looking up. “Its good water. I can tell you that.”

     “That’s God’s water,” Fred said again. “Take all you want.”

 

Special Techniques.

     Litany.  Make a list to shorten a piece of writing, and to reveal details. See examples pg178…

     Clumping.  Cheney subdivides clumping into three types. Our research may dig up too much stuff –but important stuff, like historical or geological background stuff. What to do? Clump. Litany yes, but clump too. Historoclumping sums up the history of a place (pg.181). Geoclumping –same deal, as with Chronclumping.  The point is to get your information together and tell it in a summary form; you don’t need to write a whole discourse with the stuff. Compress it for the reader. And then move your ass on down the line, to the next scene, hopefully where the people are.

 

VERBS.

     “Intransigent verbs” Chaney writes, “…they come in disguise as am, is, was, been, had been, to be, be.  My teachers and college professors told me time and again to avoid any passive verbs, but no one ever stressed the prohibition dramatically or thoroughly enough to make a lasting impression. In subsequent years I’ve come to understand their reasoning.

     “I call these verbs ‘intransigent’ because they behave so inflexibly that one has trouble rooting them out. They keep popping up as though they believe they belong in every other sentence. They don’t.” 

     “Your reader’s brain dozes in the shade with passive verbs (forms of ‘to be’), but leaps into action when propelled by almost any other verb. ‘Killer be’s’ do have their role in passive places,. But rarely.

     “’to be’ doesn’t conjure up any image in the brain. It says only that the subject exists –and we already knew that. Tell us something new. Better yet, ‘show’ us something new.”

 

“The marines are dropped on the landing zone by helicopters.

“The marines slide rapidly down ropes dangling from the helicopters hovering about the landing zone.”

 

“She was embraced by the clown.

“The clown grabbed her and hugged her.” and

 

“As he walked up to the bar, he quickly scanned the handful of customers who were scattered around the tavern. Reggie was zeroing in on a blonde who was sitting at the bar, and positioning himself next to her. Reggie was a sucker for blondes, and he wanted this one. (50 words).

 

“As Reggie walked up to the bar, he quickly scanned the handful of customers scattered around the tavern. He zeroed in on a blonde sitting at the bar, and positioned himself next to her. A sucker for blondes, he wanted this one . “ (42 words).

 

We already mentioned in class how to weed out the qualifiers.

 

     The Godfather of Creative Nonfiction (many agree) Lee Gutkind finishes with this quote:

     “That, in fact, is the essence and the meaning of creative nonfiction: the ability to capture the personal and the private and to make it mean something significant to a larger audience, and to provide intellectual substance that will affect readers –perhaps even incite them to action or to change….”